"Get Ride of Your Bad Breath"
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I like how you began with the little story. I cant remember how many times i have began a conversation with somebody just to be hit with their bad breath and in turn not be able to escape until they finished talking. I have also though that even though it would be good to tell somebody that their breath is bad, they might get insulted so I never really mentioned it. As a pre-dental student and the son of a dentist, i have learned about all the ways things one can do to eliminated bad breath and i like how you mentioned that toward the bottom of your post. In all, good post and just another reminded to all the readers out there, brush, floss and use mouthwash at least twice a day to keep the bad breath away.
“Comfort is the Highest Priority”
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I agree with your post completely. As a pre-dental student and the son of a dentist I have always thought about and discussed with my father many different ways by which a Dentist may provide the highest level of comfort for patients. Other than being a well qualified dentist and obviously being able to perform the required procedures, a dentist must provide comfort for his or her patients if he or she wants them to come back in the future for all their other dental needs. If a dentist can do the procedures, but doesn't provide a comfortable atmosphere for the patient and make the patient feel comfortable, the patient will be looking for another dentist for future oral care.
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In your intro paragraph you gave a very detailed description on what you are going to discuss. My only criticism is that I do not really know what your argument is. Your argument now is “Seeing how these two topics revolve around dentistry, I chose to share with my readers in today’s post two comments, which I left on two other blogs” but that is not really an argument. For example, you could have argued the increase in bad breath due to poor dental care and given reasons why you thought this has happened. In your comment on the bad breath blog, you do a good job of explaining how bad breath has personally affected you, giving your post a level of realism and relativity. I wish you would have add in some studies or surveys that discuss bad breath or gave other arguments on the issue. Overall, it was a very interesting blog to choose to write on because we all hate bad breath!
I like the second blog you chose to write on. It is important to have a dentist that you like. I like how you brought in your father, a current dentist, in to the post. Maybe you have found some support on the internet about “the most credible dentist”, “what makes a good dentist”, or other topics that pertain to being a successful dentist in all respects. Support always makes your argument stronger.
Also in your intro paragraph you say “Two of those may be the cost of dental care, which I have focused on, in previous posts and also bad breath which is something that we all dead with everyday, either directly or indirectly” but I do not think you really discuss how expensive dental care is in this post.
Overall, you propose two very interesting topics in your post. If you had added a little more evidence to your articles, the posts could be even stronger. You did very well in expressing your feelings about the topics and I really liked when you brought your father in as a resource. I like the pictures a lot…the second one could maybe even be bigger. Overall, good job and interesting topics.
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